Tuesday, August 20, 2013

Let's Play Where The Hell Is The Editor




"ANDREO PASCALI, cursing the day the admirable Knox had left his employ, taking retirement to make her home with her recently widowed sister in Kent, impatiently lifted the final sheet of paper, scanned it in a nanosecond and even more impatiently tossed it aside."

First sentence.

First paragraph.

And it pretty much sets the tone for the rest of the book.

There's nothing quite like starting the book with a poorly-written run-on sentence.

EDITOR, WHERE ARE YOU?

Perplexed,
Penny


16 comments:

A Buckeye Girl Reads said...

I'm not a grammar nazi, but holy run on sentence batman!

Silvia said...

Even the first word!
The Italian version of Andrew is ANDREA! The name ANDREO doesn't exist. It isn't like Paolo (m) / Paola


Shirra said...

Grammar Police should be dispatched. Ouch!

Liberty said...

I think most of the editors were fired about ten years ago. This is only one example out of thousands you could have chosen, Penny.

There are times when reading has become the newest game in town, you must fill in the blanks or change the words for the book to make sense.

Julia Barrett said...

Uh.... what? I'm perplexed as well. But, Penny, if you buy a book with that title what do you expect? LOL!

Geek Amicus said...

A short attention span is an admitted failing of mine, but holy cow, I lost interest in that sentence after Knox and completely lost the meaning half way through. How many characters were in that sentence? Andreo, whom I am assuming is man, Knox, whom I'm assuming is a person, and "she". So I'm totally confused.

Tasha Brandstatter said...

The reader, perplexedly scratching her brunetted head, turning the page on the poorly-written book by an author she'd never heard of but who apparently hadn't thought a great deal about the opening to his or her book, wondered wherefore the period was in this sentence, and whence she would see it, before at last giving up and skipping to the next paragraph.

Penelope said...

Hi Colette! I wish I could tell you it gets better. But I'd be lying.

Penelope said...

Silvia...Oops! Always good to research international names. :^)

Penelope said...

Shirra...do you have your badge and sunglasses and walkie-talkie? Once you get your first fifty busts, you also get a red Sharpie marker. Good luck!

Penelope said...

Liberty...I know. This one is an oldie, but I have seen a lot of bad editing lately, too. And it's not just in self-pubbed books, as many folks like to complain. There are plenty of big-name traditionally edited novels with errors. I guess there are not as many Grammar Police around these days. :^(

Penelope said...

Julia...I know. I know. You get what you get and you can't get upset.

I just roll my eyes.

Penelope said...

Geek! I think this is the first book I've read by this particular author, so I don't know her story. But I'm guessing with some big-names, their editors no longer do anything to their books. Which is clearly evident when you're reading them. EVERYONE needs an editor. The end.

Penelope said...

Tasha: A++++++++++++

Thank you!

Jessi said...

Eeek! This is just one more blight on Harlequin's name. I haven't spent $ on a Harlequin in years in protest of their pitiful contracts and terrible treatment of authors. I'm sure they have many talented authors in their catalog, but sheesh. It's becoming such a crapshoot.

Penelope said...

Jessi, I agree their authors deserve much, much better as far as their contracts go. I have read quite a few good ones also, but this one was clearly dated and amusing.

And now I am addicted to "housekeeper" romances. HELP ME! I read another one yesterday. Hee!